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Old 04-16-2008, 05:55 PM
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Re: Calling all critics

Good advice from Dale, so I'll just add "use a spelling checker" and a couple other notes. A spelling checker wouldn't have caught "base", or "to" where "too" should have been used, but it would have caught the others like "wile" and "grabed". Also I don't know if a grammar or style checker would catch this, but the sentence "I think this was maybe due to this was his first show at the Tralf", should probably be written "I think this was maybe due to this being his first show at the Tralf". Other than that, nice review, but as Dale said a bit more detail would be useful, but of course you may have word limits depending on where you want to publish. Maybe just try to write down everything you remember about the gig and then edit the review to make it more concise and remove non-essential stuff to hit whatever word limits you may be working with. Good luck and thanks for the review!
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